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The money, spent on space research, has brought enourmous benefits to humankind, but it could be more usefully applied. How far do you agree?

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Some people believe that
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 of spending the national budget on
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 exploration, that amount of capital should be allocated to urgent issues
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 as poverty, education, or worldwide crises.
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, I am opposed to
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 judgment.
Space
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 explorations are remarkably precious from scientific and economic perspectives.
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 inquiry has broadened humans' horizons about the universe, the Earth's origin, and the solar system.
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 valuable knowledge is of direct benefit to the emergence of technology breakthroughs. Utilizations derived from accomplishments outside the Earth are not ambiguous but are much more familiar to the general population. The weather forecast,
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, was no longer an arduous task like before with the valuable support from the weather satellite system. Beyond that,
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 investigation has a vital role to play in developing the Global positioning system (GPS). It is easy to imagine how many obstacles pilots will be likely to confront to navigate a plane, and
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, taxi drivers tend to be troublesome to reach destinations, without GPS.
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, pouring fund into
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 does not mean the other crucial problems are neglected. Only a limited number of states have astronautic programs.
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, governments of the majority of nations still concentrate the vast money and resources to cope with poorness, environmental pollution, and illiteracy. Even in predominant countries in
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 affairs, the money invested in
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 missions only takes up a few percentages of their national budget.
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, inventions involving explorations of outer
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 help to solve global real-life puzzles to some extent. To be specific, satellite internet has provided a working platform for outsourced jobs in developing countries, contributing to a significantly decreased unemployment rate in these nations. In conclusion,
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 inquiry is undeniably beneficial, without consuming too much. People,
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, should attach great importance to progress
space
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 exploration
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 other priorities.

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