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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?

#rubbish #governments #amount
One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is making a great
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 of garbage. It is undeniable that
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 of goods has become an essential part of
waste
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. For the purpose of
this
 essay, why is it happening and how the
government
 can change
this
 tendency, both questions will be scrutinized. Everybody knows that modern people prefer buying something in a package which one will be thrown in a trash bin at home,
as a result
, a lot of litter collects after every
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. A good example here is
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 and previous generations. Our parents used reusable packages,
thus
, they produced
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 amount of refuse,
on the contrary
, people in our time fond of disposable items,
such
 as dishes, packs and any covers,
as a result
, nowadays, especially urban dwellers, is produced more rubbish. Naturally, the
government
 can reduce
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 number of garbage using for packaging
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goods reusable containers which would be made from glass, wood or material. Another method of
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 of trash is
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 for individuals that it is the
first
 enemy of our nature and that we should care of our surrounding by reducing of
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the quantity
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 of litter. Another side of the coin is producing waste of industry, obviously, the
government
 has to motivate to create non-waste production that it is the most perspective direction of developing of any factories. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned up in our final analysis, we can say that producing of garbage can be solved by the
government
 as well as by ordinary citizens.
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