Nowadays university education is considered very important for people's future. However, there are a lot of successful people who didn't get higher education. Do you think that higher education is necessary to succeed in life? Justify your opinion with relevant examples.

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College
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Education
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is very important to one’s future though some
people
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say that others have become successful without going to
college
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. In
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essay, I will discuss that higher
education
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is essential to become successful in
life
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. Nowadays higher
education
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is one of the best pathways to become successful in
life
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.
People
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with universities diplomas are far more qualified to find jobs and demand higher positions. They are
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in a better position to demand higher pays because of their expertise, competencies and knowledge. Companies, corporations and other institutions are always searching for the best persons with very impressive educational backgrounds for
a certain positions
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, and it’s always based on the educational attainment of an individual who’s right for the position.
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, in the aspect of promotion in
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, one of the requirements is always the educational attainment of the applicant not to mention his other qualifications. Overall,
college
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degrees really matter when it comes to job promotions, higher pays and job security.
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, there are some
people
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who do not possess
college
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diplomas and yet are very successful in
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and were only able to pursue their higher
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later in
life
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. There are many reasons that I can attribute to
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.
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, probably these individuals did not have the money to pursue their
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instead
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they needed to work to tend to their needs.
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, there are
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persons who are not really good in the classroom are but are good in the field. Like
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, there are many businessmen here in the Philippines who had not been to
college
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but have become successful in their companies. These
people
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are very smart and skilled and knew the ins and outs of starting a business. I could say that the vast work experiences have helped them a lot. Overall, a university diploma does not guarantee an individual’s success in
life
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. In summary, higher
education
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is very essential to a person’s success in
life
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however
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there are some individuals who do not have educational degrees and yet are prosperous in
life
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. In
this
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essay, I think that higher
education
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is a good pathway to a better
life
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and that it can guarantee a person
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a more stable, higher pay and more secured job in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foundation
  • critical thinking
  • innovators
  • vocational training
  • persistence
  • soft skills
  • adaptability
  • non-traditional pathways
  • lifelong learning
  • disparities
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