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Some people think that zoo are cruel and all zoos should closed.However, some people think zoo can help protect animals Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Zoos
 play a huge role in expanding
culture
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 borders for humans. Taking
animals
 under their freedom is a very awful situation.
First
 of
all
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 cages where
animals
 live are small and sometimes dirty. Feeding
in particular
 time creates conditions when they forget their own hunting skills.
Also
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,Also
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 some
zoos
 use
animals
in
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for
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 entertainment, getting additional money. As an example in some zoo creatures facing a long training period before
show
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the show
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 and if they obey they are punished. All these non-normal acts can lead to closing those types of animal parks.
On the other hand
,
zoos
 respond to the process of protecting
animals
. I wanted to say that species that live in nature faced
a
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 problem of losing food and continental migration caused by climate change. As an example some
animals
 that we can count by two hands, are in Red book, people do illegal hunting. Solutions can be found by creating a mix of national parks and
zoos
 that are very unique places with conditions almost like in wild nature because even recreated natural environments. In
conclusion
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 I wanted to say that
zoos
 with poor conditions need to be rebuilt.
Otherwise
, natural
zoos
 need to be maintained and expanded for protecting animal purpose.
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