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Some people believe that capital punishment should not be used. Others, however, argue that it should be allowed for the most serious crimes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Starting from the past years, one of the main disputes that are usually discussed is the severity in some countries whereby crimes are punished. In fact, some
people
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 believe that capital
punishment
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 should not be used.
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, some argue that it should be used for the most serious crimes. In
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 essay, I will try to explore both views, and
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, I would state my own opinion regarding the matter. On the one hand, some advocates of capital
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 usually support their opinion saying that it is the only method to treat serious criminal
people
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. They think that especially for serial killer capital
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, represents the true and ethical strategy to respect victims' families.
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, they usually don't believe in justice and prison treatment because they are a serious threat to our community, and for
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 reason, they must be removed from our society.
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, some
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 believe in the true values of justice and equity.
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, they prefer that capital
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 must not be used and they advocated that prison therapy is a good way in which criminal
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 could be re-upbringing to stay in our world.
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, it is important to underline that
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 government authorities in some countries decided to cut out several punishments because they believe in their laws. To conclude, nowadays there are some profit and no-profit groups,
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 as ONU, that will continue to educate some countries where the death penalty is present to remove that. I personally hope that these types of ONU missions could enhance societies thinking on
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 topic to stop capital
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 in a land where it is present.
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