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You are a university student living in on-campus accommodation. You are having some problems with the Internet connection in your room. Write to the supervisor of your residence, in your letter: ● Introduce yourself ● Inform him/her of the situation ● Request that the problem be fixed

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Dear Sir or Madam,
This
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 letter is to inform you that for the past few
days
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days,
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 I have been facing severe internet disconnections in my room. I am Nilesh Majumdar, an engineering student currently residing in the Eden Hall building, room 9. I am from the electronics and instrumentation department, currently in
my
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the
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 final semester of my undergraduate degree. Since
last
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 week, I have been facing frequent internet
outtages
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outages
 between 7 to 11 PM
everyday
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. Given that my placements are next week, it is paramount that I have a stable internet connection throughout so that I can prepare well for my aptitude exams and interviews. Restarting the router or even plugging in the LAN cable directly on my computer did not work, so I
had been visiting
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 the local coffee shop
for
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to
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preparation
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. I would really appreciate
if
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it if
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 one of your technicians could come over and fix
this
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 issue at the earliest. Someone visited
lask
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last
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 week to check
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 and confirmed it was working fine, but
obviously
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obviously,
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 it is not. I pay INR 1000 every month on top of my tuition fees for
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 service, and
this
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 has really not been satisfactory. I look forward to hearing from you. Kind Regards, Nilesh Majumdar

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task achievement
Consider providing a little more detail about specific attempts you've made to solve the issue and any previous communications with the supervisors. This would help to create a more complete picture of the situation and emphasize the urgency of the resolution.
coherence cohesion
Adding transition words and phrases could improve the logical flow and make the text smoother to read. Ensure each paragraph connects well with the next to enhance coherence.
coherence cohesion
The letter is well-organized with clear paragraphs each handling a specific point, making it easy for the reader to follow.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is appropriate and respectful, which is well-suited for a formal complaint letter.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and closing are clear and appropriately respectful, enhancing the overall formality and politeness of the letter.
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