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Some schools are very strict about their school uniforms and the appearance of their pupils, while other schools have a very relaxed dress code. What are the advantages and disadvantages of children of having a school uniform?

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Uniforms play a major role in some institutions not only in school but other workplaces as well. Some schools have mandatory school uniforms for scholar whereas others choose to not have them. There are both pros and cons of the
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 code that I would like to highlight in the following essay. Having a
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 for a pupil in schools brings a sense of equality, as not all the pupil have the same financial status. It removes the possibility of having rich and poor discrimination among children. For ,instance a scholar from a wealthy family can wear something costly to show off and bully other
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, the
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 eradicates the possibility of
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 an event .The student learns cleanliness as they have to wear the same costume daily so they try to keep it clean. Other advantages include discipline because school attire consists of many different things like a shirt, trousers, tie, socks and everything together is considered as fully dressed. It brings the responsibility upon
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 to
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 like an ideal student.
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, some times it becomes boring for children to wear the same
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 on regular basis. A couple of schools offer expensive
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 which is not easy for every parent to afford. As I mentioned in the above paragraph , if a pupil wears expensive clothes
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 that might develop a sense of competition among
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 and they can force their parents to get them overpriced dresses. Some people might relate the
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 code with their religion and might think it is inappropriate for their child to wear it. To conclude, the merits of
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 overcome the demerits always. As some qualities are important for
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 to develop at an early age.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • peer pressure
  • bullying
  • socio-economic differences
  • school spirit
  • unity
  • discipline
  • belonging
  • self-expression
  • individuality
  • personal development
  • fashion-related distractions
  • academic performance
  • morning routine
  • comfort
  • financial burden
  • cultural differences
  • diverse backgrounds
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