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Although more and more people read news on the Internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #news #internet #newspapers #source
Some
people
 believe that despite the spreading popularity of online media,
traditional
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 newspaper will still hold the most vital position among newsreaders. In my opinion,
this
 idea is rather absurd as the
Internet
 has become increasingly dominant due to the benefits it offers. The
first
 thing that attracts
people
 to reading news on online sources is their easy access. With the presence of the
Internet
 around almost every corner of the world,
people
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a
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portable device
such
 as
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mobile phone can access huge storage of news. In fact, the latest events,
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 IS Terrorist attacks, would be updated immediately on CNN or New York Times.
By contrast
, with prolonging procedures including editing and printing, traditional newspapers might not be able to compete with the
Internet
 in terms of the updating speed. Another benefit with which the
Internet
 can, from my point of view, take over the position of
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 newspaper is the new experience it brings to readers. One limitation of newspapers is that
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 cannot convey visual messages to the
people
 who read news on a regular basis. Meanwhile, the non-stop progress of the technology industry has unfolded the possibility to upload videos and voice records on various online websites.
For instance
, soccer fans these days can rewatch their favourite matches anytime they want with only a laptop connected to the
Internet
, which a mere paper cannot do. In conclusion, I disagree that printed newspaper would continue to be the most crucial source of information because more and more
people
 will be drawn to use the
Internet
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliable
  • credible
  • focused
  • immersive
  • tangibility
  • tradition
  • access
  • digital devices
  • demographics
  • older generation
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