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As a result of tourism and the increasing number of people travelling, there is a growing demand for more flights. What problems does this have on the environment? What measures could be taken to solve the problems?

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Nowadays, most
people
 prefer
airplanes
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like
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as
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 transport for travel. The increase in the number of
travelers
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 directly increases the number of
flights
 and the impact on the environment increases.
This
 essay will discuss
problem
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the problem
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 of
influence
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the influence
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 of
flights
 on the environment and solutions
of
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this
 issue. Due to the rapid development of technology, the exchange of information has become easier.
Therefore
, many
people
 share their photos or videos on social networks, thereby drawing readers' attention to
this
 place.
This
 increases the number of
flights
 and harmful emissions into the air. According to the latest research by scientists, about 64% of
travelers
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 learn information through social networks.
For example
, an important football event in Russia in 2018 was able to attract many
people
 using the Internet. One possible solution to
this
 problem could be virtual travel. If
people
 prefer VR
traveling
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instead
 of real,
then
 we can reduce the
amount
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 of greenhouse gases.
This
 idea was put forward by Swedish students.
Moreover
,
this
 decision is to reduce the demand for tickets and unnecessary costs.
For instance
 in Sweden VR
traveling
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 technology actively tested. To conclude,
problem
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the problem
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 of
influence
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the influence
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 of
flights
 can be extremely hazardous for the environment,
therefore
 citizens should find
effective
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an effective
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 solution for
this
. As far as, I concerned
this
 issue will be one of the
key-points
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 in
government’s
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the government’s
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check list
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.
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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