It is more important for school children to learn about their local history than world history. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, one of the important lessons which students should be learning in their schools is
history
.
Although
, Personally I believe that, the past of the earth could bring a wide range of benefit for them, they must pay more attention to their country's past. the past of the earth, more specifically in, stone age there are a lot of experiences which is good for students to know. The
first
pictures on the caves can teach us how our fathers communicate with each other without any languages that could be more valuable for the developments of many languages.
moreover
, the
first
civilisation could teach to our children the basic structure of the buildings and cities, which help them to develop these ways as best as they can.
In contrast
, in my opinion, It is not necessary for any teenager to know the ancient
history
of nature but their own country's past can beneficial for them. the main
history
is about which what happened in your country and it is more useful for us to know and learn about our past. the teenager should be learning just about their past which is more touchable for them rather than the world's
history
and most of their time must be spent on some important subjects
such
as mathematics.
furthermore
, it is our duty to learn and teach them to our kid in some ways.
For example
, we can easily provide our past's culture by some creative and practical ways
such
as fashion designs. many of the clothes which are produced these days could be print by some historical texture and made these products trend. In all, many subjects in our
history
which we teach them to our children are not important than others, which can more efficient that we spend that to others subjects.
However
,
personally
Add a comma
,personally
show examples
I believe that we must provide our local past which students can deal with that easily.
Submitted by maleki.ali94 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: