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Some universities offer online courses as an alternative to classes delivered on campus. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Certain educational institutes provide a distance learning scheme through online
studies
 of
curiculum
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curriculum
 courses which can be an alternate way of institutional
studies
, which can be taught in the university's premises. I personally reckon that rendering online
study
 has good and bad aspects, which I can explicate in the following paragraphs through some practical examples.
To begin
 with, the
first
 and foremost beneficial outcome of
the
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online
studies
 is that it confers the great opportunity to teach
myriad
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 of
students
 from every corner of the world, which can be delivered at any time, anywhere, and
any
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 condition.
This
 can be simplified by saying that
on campus
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studies
 can be taught
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the
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 particular time and at the same place which is
specially
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 a classroom
study
. For illustration, in order to provide an education in
this
 pandemic situation, there are
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numerous universities
who
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 use
digital
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 platform to continue their
studies
 through various intermediate platforms
such
 as Microsoft Teams, Zoom, Google Meet, etc.
Furthermore
, due to
such
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 we see
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reduction
education
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 in
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 of fossil fuel consumptions, which can improve the quality of air in our environment.
On the other hand
, distance learning has
the
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certain shortcomings which can not underestimate by scholars and
techears
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teachers
.
Firstly
, scholars believe that there
are
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 plenty of
distration
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distraction
distractions
 come when pursuing
study
 through online mode, which can be reduced the focus of
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,
hence
 the pupils can not
concertrate
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concentrate
 during the lectures.
For instance
, there are
the
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 few cases where learners encounter background noises
which
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 drop their attention from the
study
.
Secondly
, some education providers say that sometimes
students
 just join the class for showing their availability.
Such
 as,
students
 do other recreational activities when their classes are running, just putting their audio on mute and disable their video so that they do whatever they want during their live classes.
Finally
, online
studies
rerequisite
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prerequisite
 the internet connection and other gadgets like laptop, microphone and camera, which make the online
study
 a little expensive, and
this
 development become costly for economically deprived people. To conclude, online
study
 is one of the best
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 to learn
students
 from anywhere without going to the university's campus but I think every development has
the
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negative aspects.
Hence
, online
study
 can not
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 the way of classes
which
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deliver on campus earlier.
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