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the plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today

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the maps
illustrte
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illustrate
 how the
grance
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grace
park
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 changed from 1920 the time when it opened until now. Overall,the
park
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 saw a significant development in facilities,
also
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has
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 been removed. In 1920, there was three rose garden,one of them was located in the north of the
park
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,which is
replced
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replaced
 by a cafe .there was a stage for musicians in the west of the
park
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, which is replaced by amphitheatre for concerts. A fountain was located in the centre of the
park
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that is
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 eliminated,and another rose garden is located
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 of that fountain.
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, four seats
is
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 constructed around that rose garden. There is a children's play area
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 to the cafe,which is replaced
to
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 pond for water plants.
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,there was a glasshouse in the southeast of the
park
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, which is replaced by a water fountain
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
  • wildflower meadows
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