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Television is good for us. Do you agree or disagree?

#television
In
this
 concurrent world, it is undoubtedly true that television plays a vital role in everyone’s life. Some people concur that
tv
 is harmful to health.
However
, I quibble from them and propound that it is beneficial in day-to-day life. Adequate
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 are considerable to substantiate the concept of
tv
 is useful to us. The top-notch concrete reason is we can come to know what is happening around us.
For example
,
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research conducted in Sydney in the year 2014 has found that after the introduction of
tv
, there has been an increase of 80
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 in
knowledge
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 of current affairs, thanks to
tv
.
Secondly
, another rationale that hauls me to patron is for communication skills. According to an article published in ‘The Week’, the proportion of people from villages increasing the knowledge of different languages with the help of
tv
 has increased from 10
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 to 60
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 today.
Finally
, the rearmost coherent factor to be considered which cannot be neglected is to learn different dishes. To upload my notion, I would quote an instance of my friend, who learned many dishes with the help of
tv
 which is prima facie testimony.
Thus
, it is clear that
tv
 has certainly undeniable merits. “What is half full for some, may appear half empty to others”. So, the public
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 to distinguish that
tv
 is harmful
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 us which has multifarious reasons. To commence with, some people deem that
tv
 causes eye damage. Withal they
also
 upload that
tv
 is the biggest distraction for students from studying. In conclusion, I reiterate that there are innumerable strong factors supporting
tv
 is helpful to us.
However
, its contrary is overlooked or controlled.
Consequently
, I firmly agree
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this
 given statement.
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