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You are a student at a university in the UK. You have recently lost your university ID card. Write to the local police station, giving details of who you are, what happened and ask to record your details so that you can apply for a new ID card. Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 mail to complain about my university
ID
 that I lost yesterday
this
ID
 was very vital as it contained my name, address and
ID
 number. I am Ankit Patel, an International student at Oxford Brooks University and I have been studying here for two years. I went to an exhibition yesterday with my college peers to collect some information for our electricity renewable project and I recall very clearly, I went there in the afternoon and I was there from 2:00 to 5:00 and at that time I had my
ID
 in my pocket but later when I reached home and when I was changing my clothes, I had not found my
ID
 in the pocket. Even,though I tried to find it in my bags and went back to the way from where I came to check the
ID
 but did not find it. Because it is very important to get entry into the college and exam, Please write down my complaint, so I can apply for a new
ID
 as soon as possible. Your Faithfully, Ankit Patel
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coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow of your paragraphs. Ensure each paragraph has a single clear idea and transitions smoothly to the next. For example, you could separate the details of how the ID was lost and the importance of the ID card into two paragraphs.
task achievement
Be more concise and avoid repetition to maintain clarity and coherence. For instance, once you have mentioned the importance of the ID card, it's not necessary to repeat why it's important.
greeting and closing
The letter opens and closes appropriately with a polite tone.
task achievement
You provided detailed and relevant information about how the ID was lost, which adds to the completeness of your response.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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