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The tendency of news reports in the media to focus more on problems and emergencies than on positive developments is harmful to the individuals and the society as a whole. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is some times argued that news article shows negative and problematic articles more than the bright side of the society, which is affecting the
community
 negatively. I completely agree with
this
 statement and there are various reasons for that, which will be discussed in the essay. Media plays a major role in public. public tend to believe what is shown to them. There are a variety of factors that could affect a person and the
community
 as well.
For instance
, news reports showcase crimes that are hideous again and again on various news channels and minors of the society learn from them and commit those crimes.
Also
, in some ,cases they even try to leave the country and settle in different nations for a better lifestyle and safe environment they are unaware of the developments and good things going around them. Another factor is that some times these reports show data in a way that creates fear among
people
 which could lead to creating stress in the
community
. In a country where there are
people
 of different ethnicity live together, any wrong information or,
the
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false report focused on one race could destroy the inner peace of the country. As a neighbourhood,
people
 might develop grudges on each other seeing these negative reports over and over again,
this
 will decrease the humanity among
people
. To conclude, I would agree that media is declined toward showing the bad face of the
community
instead
 of the bright side.
Submitted by Jagdeep Kaur on

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