some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some believe that advertising has an extremely influences on
people
to buy their needs. Others
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argue
argued
that
people
do not pay
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do not pay attention to advertisements any
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attention
to
advertisements
no longer when they want to buy things .
Although
publicizing has a positive impact on buying things, I believe that we do not pay
attention
to advertising much when we want to provide
our
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essential needs. Nowadays, companies make a huge investment in advertising to persuade
people
buy
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their
products
. The primary goal of publicizing is that to make
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artificial
needs on
people
in order that they encourage to buy
products
, and they might think that they have essential need to buy that product.
For example
, every year the latest model of
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iPhone
Iphone
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is released,and many young
people
stay in a long queue to buy that phone. Perhaps, most of them do not need that product because their former
Iphone
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iPhone
can meet their needs for three or four years.
Therefore
, advertising in some cases is successful at persuading
indivduals
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individuals
to buy some stuff.
On the other hand
, the majority of
people
do not take notice a lot to
the
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advertisements
,and they are more aware than
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past. These days,
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have realized that lots of
advertisements
are not real,and the quality of
products
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more
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lower than publicized.
As a result
, individuals do not pay
attnetion
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attention
to
advertisements
when they buy their things,and their idea is more important than the
advertisements
.
Also
, when
thay
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they
want to meet their important needs like meat,vegetables,fruit and so on, without paying
attention
to
advertisements
they go to supermarkets and provide their needs. In conclusion, I believe
people
have become more aware than before,and they know how they spend their money on most of the
products
without paying
attention
to
advertisements
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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