More and more people are suffering from health problem caused by modern life style which cannot be treated with modern well science some people think that return to traditiin medicine should be encouraged? To what extent do you agree or disgree?

Modern technology increasing day by day.In modern technology spreading many
types
of
health
problem. Some society thinks that increasing
health
problem due to new techniques. But other
people
think that old
medicine
is not a benefit for our
health
. Here I m partially agree with
this
statement. I mentioned my views in the following paragraphs.
First
of all,in modern technology
people
are facing many problems. Because
,
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it is the main reason for English
medicines
. English
medicine
bad effect on our
health
like stomach problem,knee problems and kidney problems. Modern
medicines
are very expensive. As well as poor
people
do not afford
this
situation.
This
medicine
very fastly treatment of our
health
.
people
feel very comfortable.But its many
types
of side effect.
Furthermore
, it is a waste lot of time and money.
Besides
this
,modern
medicine
is not pure.Due to wrong
medicine
death case are very increase.So in the modern era,diseases are very rapidly increasing,but
medicine
is not good for our
health
.
People
are facing many
types
of difficulties.
Second
of all,here
i
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m talk about old
medicines
. In the past time, old
medicines
are very beneficial for our
health
. As well as it is the very cheapest. It is not a side effect on our
health
.
Furthermore
,
people
easily buy old
medicine
. Tradition
medicine
makes with herbs. It is very great for
health
.
besides
this
, it is a lot of vitamins,proteins and energy.So many
people
prefer old
medicines
.Docter
also
motivation the patient about old
medicines
.
Furthermore
,many
types
of
medicines
make by tress. Because tress provide is oxygen. So old
medicine
is better than modern
medicines
. In conclusion, according to my point of view, old
medicines
are better than modern
medicines
.Because modern
medicines
made
by
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a lot of chemicals. So it is very dangerous for our
health
. On the other ,side old
medicines
are very good,
people
feel very healthy.
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