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What is your opinion about early marriage? Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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country the rate of early ,
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 wedding has increased day by day. I disagree with the teenage merger as it has a negative impact on society. The small villages of people are in favour of early
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. sometimes they forced children to marry at illegal youth.They think if one will marry at
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 he/she would learn family onus and become more mature and independent.Some uneducated part of the world believes in religious customs and the rules of their elders.For ,instance in Rajasthan parents
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 their child to get married at the
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 of 15 as they are following their
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 customs. Early
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 children more anti-social and criminal as they can't afford family expenses at an early
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 has stopped the growth of child because if he/she starts the family needs a job to take care of a family as result they need to stop their education.
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 they can not understand their partner's thoughts which make them sometimes criminal or sometimes they committed suicide.In
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 ,case the government has made some rules.for ,example in India minimum
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, parents are playing the main role in
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 as they are forcing their child for early
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.parents should thaught their children
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the importance of education. In ,
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 has more disadvantages than an advantage as it can be harmful to one's childhood.
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