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Some people think that it is good for a country's culture to import foreign movies and TV programmes. Other think than it is better to produce these locally. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #country #culture #import #movies #tv #programmes
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since the human civilisation
culture
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 is a treasure to mankind.
people
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 love to know about their ethnic background. the modern world is interconnected with
people
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 from different backgrounds. the younger generation is optimistic to adapt to new cultural values and habits. we will try to explore how
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 are reacting to different cultures around the globe' ,
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 there are some merits if we import outside cultural valuation because
people
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 will get a fair chance to interact with something new. the other important factor is the language which is the output of old ethnic habitats. acceptance is a key to explore different dimensions of language. for ,example old
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 used to say if you want to learn the mother-tongue of a country learn their
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. broadcasting foreign cultural values will have a better and long-lasting effect on
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. if we talk about demerits foreign
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 can cause serious damage and can be threatening to native cultural traditions. because some traditions are considered legal and just in Muslim countries but western countries oppose
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practices
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. for ,instance female mutilation is common practice among Muslim traditions which is compulsory for all women. these
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 are life-threatening and in the developed ,world it is a serious offence. so think twice before introducing any foreign
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' I am in the opinion that
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 sharing
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 are a sensitive issue and it requires formal certification from the government to avoid the adoption of illicit
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.
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 sharing should be restricted to countries with well define cultural value so that we can learn something better and serve our
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 healthy
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural exchange
  • enriches
  • diverse perspectives
  • storytelling methods
  • spur creativity
  • innovation
  • genres
  • styles
  • over-reliance
  • undermine
  • overshadow
  • cultural homogenization
  • national identity
  • local talent
  • linguistic relevance
  • relatable
  • accessible
  • domestic audience
  • preserve
  • cultural identity
  • promote
  • balanced approach
  • cultural landscape
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