You are writing to an old family friend to ask him/her to attend your birthday party. Write a letter to invite your friend and: • Tell your friend about the party you are having for your birthday • Explain how important it is for you that he/she attends • Suggest that your friend can stay at the hotel next to the venue during the visit

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Dear Sara, How have you been? I missed the wonderful time we had together at the school. I thought I

throw

Wrong verb form

threw

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a birthday

party

on 21 June and I

wish

Verb problem

wanted

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to attend

this

party

This

party

will be held at White Venue on Ka Street.

This

party

is my 30th birthday and it has a sentimental value for me.

In addition

, I believe it would be a tremendous experience for both of us. Because of some unique specifications, all my guests would have a special level for me. I will consider the best place and the glamourous menu for food.

Therefore

, you are attending

this

party

is very important to me. It would be a blast. In terms of accommodation, I bet you won't have any concerns.

This

venue is in the vicinity of The Blue Hotel. If you want, I can stay at

this

hotel next to the venue during the visit. I hope you can make it up to come to my

party

, Best wishes. Mahsid

Submitted by kargar.mh1992 on Tue May 21 2024

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suggestion

Your letter generally flows well, but some sentences could be clearer. For example, instead of 'I wish to attend this party,' try 'I would be delighted if you could attend this party.'

suggestion

Try to elaborate a bit more on why this birthday is so important to you and what makes it a 'tremendous experience.'

writing tone

The letter is polite and friendly, which is suitable for the context of writing to an old friend.

content completeness

You included all the necessary information about the party, its importance, and accommodation options.

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

168 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

reconnect
celebration
meaningful
cherish
special occasion
accommodation
venue
significance
memorable
anticipate
grateful
reminisce
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