More and more people are eating healthy food and exercise regularly. What are the reasons for that? What can we do to make other people do the same?

The number of
people
adhering to healthy food and regular physical activities is rising. The main reasons for that are advances in science and awareness of
people
about the benefits of an active lifestyle. Among possible approaches aiming to make other
people
do the same is school programs telling about the importance of sport and good food. At present, technologies allow
people
to discover more about their health and what should be done to maintain it on optimal level for many years.
Firstly
, with the help of the
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it is relatively easy to find information about
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ways of taking care of
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body.
Secondly
, evolving technologies allow humankind to reveal the most beneficial habits and patterns of behaviour to stay healthy as long as possible.
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, some scientific studies noted that vegetarianism cannot be applied by any person and may lead to serious diseases. One of the ways of increasing the number of persons leading a healthy lifestyle is launching more
sport
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events. The more individuals participate in
such
events, the more active
people
will be. Another possible solution
is disciplines
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at schools about the significance of proper diet and physical activities.
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, in Japan, some schools included into their curriculum
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lessons about nutrition. Not only does it affect children but
also
it may change the mindset of many parents. In
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, the major reasons why more
people
eat good food and exercise on a regular basis are informational awareness and modern technologies stressing the importance of an active lifestyle. To support
this
tendency and enforce it many school curriculums should be modified.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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