The question is Mrs. Barrette, an English-speaking woman who lives in your town, has advertised for someone to help her in her home for few hours a day next summer. Write a letter to Mrs. Barrette. In your letter suggest how you could help her in her home why you would like to do this work when you will and will not available

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Dear Mrs. Barrett, My name is Wanchanok. I’m writing to you because I’ve seen the advertisement to seek someone who help you in your home for a few hours a day next summer. I think my expertise aligns with your requirements as well and the period of time

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with my available schedule. I would like to get

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it matches my competency and hobby. I have experience in doing household work for about 2 years since I studied master's degree in Britain part-time after I finished the classes. The main responsibilities are cleaning the floor, washing clothes, watering the plants, organizing the messy stuff in the house and cooking for their children sometimes when the nanny takes leave. I can do all of these tasks and other else which we can discuss

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, one thing that I cannot do is clean the bathroom because I am sensitive to some components in the bathroom’s cleaning agent. I hope to work with you and look forward to your response. Best Regards, Wanchanok S.

wanchanokskdrSun Feb 23 2025

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Coherence and Cohesion

While the response does address the main points of the task, it could be structured more clearly with distinct paragraphs for each suggestion. Consider using a clearer separation of ideas to improve overall clarity.

Task Achievement

Make sure to proofread for minor grammatical inaccuracies (e.g., 'who help you' should be 'who can help you'). This will enhance the professionalism of your letter.

Task Achievement

Your introduction is clear and directly responds to the advertisement, making your intentions well-known.

Task Achievement

You provided specific examples of tasks you can handle, which demonstrates your suitability for the job.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

176 words

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