Consumers are faced with an increasing number of advertisements from competing companies. To what extent do you think are consumers influenced by advertisements? What measures can be taken to protect them?

Customers are influenced by the growing number of adverts from opponent firms. I think that the level of their influence is significant as the beautiful pictures always attract
people
.
However
, in order to avoid a harmful
effect
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some steps ought to be taken by the government. In my opinion, advertisement has a crucial impact on crowd’s choice nowadays.
To begin
with, it is well known that striking posters or promos are the most efficient way to sell the companies’ production.
For instance
, I usually opt for different services or products after observing them in a commercial.
Furthermore
,
people
often try to find something better
then
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they had previously.
In other words
, once receiving an awful experience with something a person will search until they find a decent alternative.
Thus
, companies use
this
fact to increase the number of their clients.
People
are vulnerable to advertisement especially if it is promoted by celebrities. So, in order to reduce the effect on
people
’s mind, attitude, and budget a variety of measures should be taken at the governmental level.
First
, different types of social video clips or prospects may be created due to raising
people
’s awareness of the advert’s influence on the customers. It might help to prevent some useless purchases and save
people
’s budget.
Second
, the government can regulate the information which is presented to consumers.
For example
, the special department might approve the text and a visual picture before allows it to be revealed to the public. In conclusion, in spite of the fact that marketing uses its influence to earn money in any possible way, the government have all the needed resources to limit the level of its impact on
people
.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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