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To solve the ever increasing environmental hazards throughout the world, the best way is the increase the price of fuel. What is your opinion on the above assumption?

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Nowadays, people are more aware of
the
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environmental issues compared with the past.
Although
 the high cost of fossil fuels could help us to prevent some global problems, personally I believe that there are some practical
ways
 which are necessary for keeping our world in a safe zone. In today's world, many industries need fossil fuels and one of the productive
ways
 to control excessive use of
that is
 rising the amount of them. The more price which the must pay could bring the more energy-saving and prevent global warming and many negative aspects of that
such
 as melting ice cubes.
Furthermore
, some beneficial
ways
 can provide by the high cost of
this
 energy. Many factories and producers change their approach and replace renewable energy
such
 as solar panels. In
this
way
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 they can benefit from both financial costs and prevent some global dangers. But I believe that these are not enough for solving the global problems and some other
ways
 are required.
Firstly
, governments must set some roles and regulations for factories that are harmful to the environment. Many factories use heavy industrial machines without any attention to our world. these machines demand a huge amount of fuels ,which is one of the main reason for global warming ,
Secondly
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 people should be aware of the negative aspects of population growth. Increasing the number of humans demand more foods and many other necessary basic needs. So the more needs bring the more constructions which provided for solve these demands so some population control must be required by countries. In general, there is more than one way to saving our planet and the government play a crucial role in that.
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