You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria Say what is wrong with it Suggest how it could be improved

Dear sir, I am a regular visitor who eats lunch at the college cafeteria purely on grounds that the
food
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in it is hygienic and fresh, suitable priced and it has a friendly atmosphere. There are,
however
, a number of deficiencies that I believe should be put right.
To begin
with,
although
your staffs try to keep the tables clean, there are not enough employees at peak time to clear their tables themselves
then
they finished eating.
Moreover
, certain pupils do not bother to do
this
, there are numerous students who do not wait in the queue to be served, which is very annoying for the majority of us.
Last
but not least, there is only one billing counter and
this
makes it extremely busy. As mention earlier, from my perspective, it would be a good idea providing that more signs were put around the cafeteria asking everyone to put their plates and cutlery on the trolleys provided and throw away their leftovers and rubbish.
In addition
, you should tell students when they are being anti-social and jumping the queue.
Finally
, you should consider adding more billing
counter
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so that we are not late for our classes. I appreciate your time and attention to these matters. Yours faithfully, Thu Loan Nguyen
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