Discipline is an ever increasing problem in modern schools. Some people think that discipline should be the responsibility of teachers,while others think that this is a role of parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Some people reckon that teachers are responsible for
discipline
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in
schools
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today; some others believe that students should learn
discipline
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by
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their families. Needless to say, nowadays,
discipline
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has become a major problem in
schools
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. I reckon that the process of
discipline
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learning starts
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parents
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and continuous in school; remember always
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point has more importance. There are some people who believe that
discipline
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should be learnt during the process of
education
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by teachers and
parents
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are not responsible for their
children
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's
behavior
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. In my opinion, teachers are responsible for
discipline
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learning in
schools
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especially primary
schools
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but it doesn’t mean that family environment has no importance. According to the statistics, most of the young lawbreakers in
community
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have grown up in an inappropriate environment in their family and they have continued their
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also
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;
therefore
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,
children
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should learn
discipline
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at home
first
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and
then
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complete their learning in school.
On the other hand
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, some individuals think that learning
discipline
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is one of the duties of
a good
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a good parent
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parents
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. According to the psychologist researches,
children
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have a great potential to learn new things at their
first
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ages before they go to school;
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, if
parents
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pay enough attention to learning
discipline
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to their
children
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before they start their
education
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, it will be more effective than any other time. In conclusion,
parents
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and
schools
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have considerable duties to learn
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discipline
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the discipline
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to pupils and
children
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and both of them have own role. Eventually, I reckon that learning
discipline
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is one of the good
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parents
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parent's
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duties and
children
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should know
discipline
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before they begin their
education
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process; meanwhile,
schools
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also
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have
own
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their own
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role in learning
discipline
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.
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