Many teenagers now have their own smart phone. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion.

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essay will substantiate both merits and demerits in the following paragraph with relevant examples and my own opinion in the conclusion. Smartphone has become a small world that we carry everywhere we go. Because of advanced technology youth become smarter and smarter despite the fact, it has some downsides,
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as excessive use of smartphones will harm individuals eyesight as well as give some mental stress.
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of Boston university-related excessive uses of cellphones by
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smartphones and others who do not have or have a normal phone which
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so much popular in
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days masses got to know the value of internet along with the important uses of gadgets.
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covid-19 situation all schools, colleges altogether with other short term classes are become online and because of that
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really useful for
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to join the classes while seating at home. Not only
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their cell
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for entertainment like watching movies, playing games, you name it, but
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purposes.
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, Booking movie tickets, paying bills as well as getting information related
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becoming effortless.
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a vital role in an individuals life.
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small gadget we keep up with the world, got to know
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updates, trends like what is going around,
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all is knowing easier through the online news or mobile applications. To conclude, considering above mentioned points it is evident that,
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it has some drawbacks
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do believe that, it has more positive sides which lead
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to a successful career.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication
  • access to information
  • safety and security
  • entertainment
  • educational opportunities
  • addiction
  • excessive screen time
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • distraction
  • lack of focus
  • privacy concerns
  • social disconnection
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • opinion
  • outweigh
  • limits
  • screen time
  • online safety
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