Medical services should be run by profit-making companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Whether
healthcare
should be operated by profit-oriented providers is up for debate. I believe there are profound repercussions if
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services are
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by enterprises.
First
and foremost,
this
phenomenon will enlarge the gap between the wealthy and the deprived. If medical systems are designed for being profit chasing, limited manpower and resources will be occupied by the top 1% and
this
will force the poor resort to suffer from curable disease and lower
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. Countries without public health services
such
as the US,
for example
, is one of the regions where underprivileged people are trapped in a vicious circle of being ill without insurance cover for prohibitive medical bills.
Furthermore
, fundamental researches often involve long-term investment, which may not
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profitable
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, could be dismissed due to funding issues. The new mRNA vaccines for COVID-19,
for example
, took more than 20 years of investment and are lifesavers during
this
pandemic.
On the other hand
, there are various problems for non-profit
healthcare
providers. Financial supports are
the
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constant challenges. Regions with national health services, even though with
the
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aid from governments, still plagued by
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distribution of service users. Some patients taking the
healthcare
systems for granted, maybe visit
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unit for less serious symptoms and wear out medical staff.
Subsequently
, doctors and nurses are losing their motivation towards advanced researches and techniques. Taiwan which is famous
of
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affordable health
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,
for instance
, are facing the looming trend of no youngsters in the medicare workforce. In conclusion, governments should seek a balance of profit-oriented and welfare
healthcare
systems to offer the public a sustainable society.
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