Some people think that in this modern world people are getting dependent on each other, while others think that this world makes them more independent of each other. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In
this
present
world
, many
people
are debating whether or not they are getting more dependent on each other or vice versa.
However
, in my opinion, I think the current
world
we are living in makes us independent from one another because of how
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affects our current state. Living dependently
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each other are currently decreasing due to the innovations and changes in
this
world
. In the past,
people
used to rely
from
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their friends and families in order to sustain their lives because it is hard to do it by themselves. They rarely have the strength and abilities to
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them due to
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of resources and money.
For example
, if students
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to finish college, they solely rely on their parents to be able to graduate.
This
has been a major problem
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from
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third
world
countries. Meanwhile, because of our continuous
evolving
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, numerous
people
are getting more independent. It has become an evident choice because of
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number of reasons.
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is
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technology, internet paved the way for researching ideas, solutions and other means to overcome any obstacle that may come.
For instance
, washing machines, microwave ovens and
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have been a constant partner towards making lives easier.
Second
, independent skills are adapted and being taught as early as childhood days, and
as a result
, they become more resilient
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any circumstances given.
Lastly
, the change
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how
people
think, which is more
open minded
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, is how it affected the
world
that it created more possibilities that aid
people
in becoming self-sufficient.
This
sense of individualism
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rather more accepted and seen as a positive change for everybody’s sake which makes it inevitable. In conclusion, becoming a self-sustained individual will continue to take place and becoming so, will create a lasting positive outcome for everyone.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interdependence
  • globalization
  • technological advancements
  • collective action
  • digital evolution
  • minimal reliance
  • direct interaction
  • empowered
  • access to technology
  • societal expectations
  • personal choice
  • leverage
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