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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. Do advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays the number of
students
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 pursuing their higher
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 in a foreign
country
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 is on a rise. Despite numerous obstacles,
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 growing trend contains plenty of positive aspects related to opportunities for self-growth as well as drawbacks regarding the associated high cost. The pros of
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are decisively outweigh
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 the cons. One commonly held perception is that studying abroad can foster personal growth and increase one's level of knowledge. By living alone in a foreign
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,
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 are more likely to immerse themselves in
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, which will broaden their knowledge regarding their field of study and language skills.
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,
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 will gain distinguished experiences when they are subjected to unknown situations, which they would not experience if they remained in their home
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. A good example of
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 when most
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 who relocate to continue their studies improve and acquire skills of housekeeping and cooking. In direct
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 to the above advantages, a significant downside of studying overseas is related to high expenses. By enrolling in a study abroad program,
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 are required to not only pay the tuition fees
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 but
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 additional funds for living expenses, which lead most international
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 to apply for a scholarship or take
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study abroad loans. For
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 reason, according to recent statistics, the number of youngsters pursuing their higher
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 overseas has considerably decreased over the past three years due to high expenditure that most
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 find impossible to afford. In conclusion. Despite the negative aspects of studying abroad, which includes
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 financial cost. The benefits that
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 gain from being in a foreign
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 are far greater, and
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 continuing higher
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 will always remain to be one of the most beneficial experiences for a university student.
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