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There are severe social consequences to housing shortages in cities and only the government can solve these problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Lack of affordable housing is a serious problem in many cities. There are some people who think that the solution for
this
 issue only can be formulated by the government. I strongly agree with
this
 statement since they have enough resources to handle the scenario effectively.
Firstly
, constructing
a
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well-planned and low-cost houses requires huge
a
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amount of financial support that can only offer by the government sector.
This
 is because the authority has
funds
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 since they levy taxes from its citizens and generate revenue from various businesses.
For example
, in many developed countries, the Uk and the USA,
buiding
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building
 housing colonies under the state, rather
thn
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than
in
that
 the residents. From these examples, it is evident that how significant the role of governmental bodies in
this
.
Secondly
, apart from money, other resources
such
 as man and materials are
also
 required. Finding a suitable place for
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housing can be a challenge as
this
 may involve serious legal proceedings that can be properly handled by the authority.
For instance
, sometimes, old buildings in the proposed place can be knocked down to make a way for the new one.
This
 often creates some protest from society and may erupt a communal riot. In
such
situation
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, only, the state can tackle the issue amicably, which rarely
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by
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 individuals.
Therefore
, the government should come forward and take
the
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responsibility in dealing with the
shoratage
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shortage
 of housing. In conclusion, people have a different opinion on who is responsible
in
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 constructing and handling problems of poor housing facilities in the urban areas. I totally consider that the state is the in charge to construct affordable homes in cities.
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