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More and more people are expected to be living in urban centers in the future. What problems will this cause?. Should governments encourage people to settle outside the city?

#people #centers #future #governments #city
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Increased urbanization across the globe is raising concern in
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 contemporary modern world.
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 of
people
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migration
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 to
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urban
cities
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 is expected to
rise
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exponential
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 in the coming future, which leads to multifarious
problems
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. Respective area
govenrnments
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governments
 should encourage
people
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 to settle in
countryside
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the countryside
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 to get rid of
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 phenomenon. In
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 essay, I will discuss both the issues and steps that government should take to provoke
people
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 to settle outside the urban
centers
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centres
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. Nowadays,
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population
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the population
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 increase among the top tier
cities
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 is at an alarming rate which is leading to several issues.
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 in place, the increased
population
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 leads to traffic congestions, which
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 leads to a spike in
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pollution
polution
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the polution
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 index. Hyderabad as a city,
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, has observed approximately twenty
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per cent
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 growth in
population
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 in the recent past year.
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 to that, it raises the cost of living of a city, as the resources required to serve the
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 accommodation will have a substantial
rise
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. Early 2000's the cost of living of Hyderabad was at 2500/Month, where a common can lead their life happily. The
rise
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 in
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,
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, has increased the cost of living to 9000/Month as per the city's latest statistics. Governments can introduce certain policies that can control
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 phenomenon in the coming
furture
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future
further
. The important solution to consider is to increase the technological infrastructure outside the urban
cities
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,
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 so that
people
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 can spread out from
cities
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 to live in rural areas. The latest initiations by the Hyderabad government,
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, has
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set up
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setup
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set up
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 10 information technology towers across its tier 2
cities
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 of the state to encourage the software industries to establish their companies.
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, they should bring in necessary regulations to support remote working culture by setting up internet facilities, so that the commute
problems
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 can be addressed to a greater extent. In conclusion,
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 in more and more
people
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 migrating to urban
cities
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 in near future leads to
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a rise
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rise
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 in
population
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, eventually spike up the
problems
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 like traffic congestions and pollution.
Govenrments
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Government
Governments
 intervention with
thought provoking
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 policies and regulations like IT
infrastucture
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infrastructure
infrastructural
 growth by offering office spaces and remote working culture promotions to decrease the commute will solve critical
problems
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 in the future.
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