Nowadays, we can watch entertainment performances from the screen (laptop, etc) and no need to watch it live. To what extend do you agree?
Everyone loves a
live
concert. All over the world
Add a comma
world,
people
go to see a live
performance
of the entertainer. Today, people
watch live
programs on the tv
, a computer, and a smartphone. They do not need to visit the theatre or Correct your spelling
TV
stadium
. I believe that life experience is far different from the screen
. However
, I partially agree with the statement.
Watching performances on screen
have
a predominant advantage, Correct subject-verb agreement
has
that is
the whole family enjoy entertainment
show at Correct article usage
an entertainment
their
home. Some concert is held far away from their hometown. It saves Correct pronoun usage
apply
a
transportation Correct article usage
apply
cost
. Fix the agreement mistake
costs
Internet
helps a lot of Correct article usage
The Internet
people
to watch on a laptop, a computer, and a smartphone. In addition
to this
, live
concerts have an
expensive Correct article usage
apply
ticket
. Some Fix the agreement mistake
tickets
people
cannot afford this
. If their whole family is interested to watch
Change preposition
in watching
this
then
it is truly costly. Further
, on-screen
help
those Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
people
who are disabled. They are urged to watch the live
show but they cannot go there because of their disability and another cause is that the stadium
is too much crowded with people
.
There is
a few drawbacks of watching a Change the verb form
are
live
performance
on screen
is that
the energy of the entertainment Verb problem
:
performance
live
is something extraordinary which can only Rephrase
apply
feel
through in that concert area. Wrong verb form
be felt
Next,
many live
performances are organised for charity purpose
. The organiser sells a ticket to Fix the agreement mistake
purposes
people
so that they can help needy people
. If folks watching through the screen
then
it is a big loss for them. For example
, in India, back in 1992, Micheal Jackson
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Jackson's
live
performance
held
at Mumbai Add a missing verb
was held
stadium
. The organiser got a lot of money from this
as well as
the performer too. Both helped the NGO and other people
with that money.
In conclusion, the screen
easier our way to watch live
performances. People
watch their favourite performer
on Fix the agreement mistake
performers
the
Change the word
their
laptop
but it can never fulfil the fun and enjoyment that can only Fix the agreement mistake
laptops
see
at the Wrong verb form
be seen
stadium
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