The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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It is true that many older
people
believe in traditional values but often
seem
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that compatible with the needs of
younger
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generation. While I agree that some traditional thoughts are outdated, I believe that many traditional ideas are still useful. On the one hand, many ideas that elderly
people
have about how
people
should live are impractical.
For example
, in the past young
people
are told to have a profession and a secure job to live without any trouble, but now with the advent of technology, there are many jobs and many tasks to do. I mean, nowadays,
people
have become
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busier than
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past.
Also
, perhaps the greatest disparity between generations can be seen in their attitudes towards gender roles. The traditional roles of men and women, as breadwinners and housewives, are no longer accepted or appropriate y most younger
people
.
On the other hand
, some traditional views and values are applicable to the modern world.
Firstly
, the majority of elder
people
were industrious and used to work with consistency and precision. These behaviours can be
transfered
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transferred
to youngsters as they enter today's competitive job market.
Secondly
, other characteristics can be seen from older
people
is that they are polite and well-mannered,
as a
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it is necessary that young generation
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learn
these
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positive
views from older
people
. in conclusion,
although
some ideas from the past are not useful, in my
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we should use other
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positive
thoughts of older generations.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traditional ideas
  • Modern life
  • Younger generations
  • Stability
  • Guidance
  • Foundation
  • Cultural heritage
  • Rigid gender roles
  • Resistance to new technologies
  • Adaptability
  • Innovative solutions
  • Respecting elders
  • Maintaining family bonds
  • Stifle progress
  • Fusion of ideas
  • Outdated values
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