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Government in many countries have recently introduced special taxes on food and beverages with high level of sugar some think that these taxes are a good idea while other disagree. Discuss both you and give your opinion?

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The
government
 in many countries have recently introduced special
taxes
 on food and beverages with a high level of sugar some think that these
taxes
 are a good idea while others disagree. Discuss both you and give your opinion? Sugar is used for boosting energy levels and main source of food for human beings,
however
 excessive use of glucose is injurious for health, for
this
 matter only regulating bodies should come into the action,impose the extra toll from individuals , whereas some people oppose
this
. In
this
 ,
an
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essay I will discuss both views.
To begin
 with, a beverage which is high in calories and carbohydrates are very energetic and addicted, consequences toddlers and youngster are widely fanciers of it and spend a large amount of money. They hardly care about the ingredients before consuming them they even forget about the adverse effects on health.
Such
 as hypertension diabetes and blood pressure, yet these diseases are rapidly increasing and keeping
this
 in mind
government
 should impose extra
taxes
 on human beings to preventing them from
this
 disorder.
In contrast
 , if regulating bodies put more levy on these products individuals will limit their buying
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as a result
 it the revenue of multinational companies will decrease, which will affect the nation's economy.
Moreover
 when the food items are costlier people who are addicted to them will try to find other ways to grab these things, which will increase the illegal act
hence
 the motive of the
government
 will not full filled. To conclude, I believe that heavy
taxes
 will not be fruitful to the
government
 for stopping the consumption of sugary drinks,
instead
 of
this
 authorities should emphasize on the awareness program,
such
 as acknowledged camps and labelling on the products for their threats.
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