Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

The advances in
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field
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taken an immense leap forward due to which humans are now able to live a much healthier and longer life. Because of the extended life span, some
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individuals believe that the retirement
age
should be exponentially increased. The world stands polarized on
this
issue. While, I believe that the older generation tends to
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the enthusiasm to work,
therefore
, they should not be allowed to do so. As we know that while
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an employee, an employer
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for the experience that he holds. Even though
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aged
people
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a lot of it,
however
, after a certain period of time the cognitive abilities of human beings are supposed to tone down. For these reasons, most of the companies have set the limit on working
age
.
For instance
, a 65 years old employee having dementia will have more chances of
commiting
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committing
errors even though he might be having a probability of
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lifespan. So, according to
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, the restricted working
age
is meant to be a correct decision.
Furthermore
, another considerable factor is that they have lived all of their lives by working for themselves, their families and for the economy.
Moreover
, many times the elderly
people
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all by themselves, so in that case, the added pressure to earn their bread and butter may lead to different mental and emotional ailments like depression. To avoid
such
circumstances, the younger generation
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should give them a break from hectic working schedules and take care of these
people
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old age
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old-
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age
. In conclusion, apart from the fact that
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humans are now having
longer
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lifespan, the retirement
age
should be restricted because of the medical conditions that
people
may suffer from. After a particular
age
,
people
who forcefully work may suffer from trauma and depression. It becomes our responsibility to nurture and protect the older generation.
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