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Many parents, mostly mothers, stay at home to take care of the house and look after children. Many believe that the government should pay them a wage for this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Despite living in a modern era many
mothers
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 still prefer to do all the households as well as take care of their children by themselves.
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 some individuals think that a salary should be paid for
this
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 reason by authorities, I strongly disagree with
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 statement. Some
mothers
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 stay at
home
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 to bring up their children on their own, so it is not possible for both
parents
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 to work out and earn money.
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 would cause some economic problems in the family, because these days, one breadwinner can not afford the expenditures of all family. Many schools are private and
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 there are many other extra classes like music classes and sports clubs which are available and required for upgrading kids. If only one of them works, the wage earner could not support all expenses
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 paying either house repairing bills or education fees. In
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 regard, many
parents
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 suffer mentally or even physically due to a lack of salary.
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, it would be better, governments support these families financially by paying a perk to
mothers
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. In
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 way, the more satisfied and happier families in a society, the fewer social problems would be in a country.
On the other hand
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, some believe that it is not logical to pay salary to
parents
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 who stayed at
home
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 to look after kids by authorities. It is vital to invest in other benefits
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 as establishing more community centres to protect families. The country needs more highly- equipped hospitals to improve people health. More facilities are required to be allocated in state schools. There are lots of other requirements in a region to be provided by governments. In my point of view, by paying money regularly to
mothers
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 who stay at
home
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 by authorities, many crucial amenities and progress would be stopped due to lack of budget in a country. In conclusion, while some people believe that some payment should be paid by governments to those
parents
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 who stay at
home
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 to take care of their children, I totally disagree with them and think that that money should be considered for different purposes and progress associated with the whole society.

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