Some people think that sports create a peace in the world. Do you agree or disagree with this?

Sports
is a game
which
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needs cooperation and trust with each other. Many
people
believe that it brings harmony
in
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the world. In
this
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will elaborate
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agreement in
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statement.
Firstly
,
human
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the human
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being is always fond of
sports
namely basketball, boxing and many more but not always ended up in peace.
For example
, many
people
love to watch basketball
especially
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during
championship
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the championship
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. But because of the pressure of the game, players tend to hurt opponents which often lead to commotions between the teams.
Furthermore
, the other members have to defend each other which created an unstoppable fight despite
of
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many referees and security guards.
Also
, the operators have to stop the game in order to dismiss the fight.
Secondly
, despite
of
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the said circumstances,
sports
still fun to watch in
majority
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the majority
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of
the
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people
.
For example
, in the Philippines, boxing is the number one sport that creating peace in the country. The famous boxer who
also
a government official, everyone is steadily watching
everytime
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he has a boxing fight.
Moreover
, other local officials make tents and large screen for the community to be able to watch it together.
Also
, the road traffic and crime rates on that day
is lessen
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due to
people
is
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supporting the famous boxer. If all countries will do
this
,
for instance
, it will create unity in the world. In conclusion, most
people
love
sports
even though it is not always ended up in harmony but some human still
choose
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to enjoy and supporting it to make a peaceful world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fostering
  • unity
  • cross-cultural understanding
  • historical moments
  • political and cultural divides
  • nationalism
  • division
  • sports diplomacy
  • peacekeeping
  • diplomatic efforts
  • grassroots
  • community cohesion
  • prevent conflict
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