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Some people think that money is the best gift for teenagers. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Money
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 is a great gift a person can have. Other people believe that it is better to give
money
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 than material things ,especially to a teenager. But some humans do not agree with
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, teenage years have many basic necessities in their life for improving themselves.
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, most of them are buying supplies for beautification like makeup, lip tint, eyelashes extensions and many more.
Parents
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 cannot provide all these materials due to many important things they should think of.
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, the teenager tends to depend on the received gifts and sometimes requested to their
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 to give them
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 some important occasion like birthdays.
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, during the adolescent
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, it's human nature that to try something independently.
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, in
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stage
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, a child wants to live separately from their mother and father.
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, only financial support that matters as long as their
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 provide and finance their needs.
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, other human being does not agree to give
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 as a gift to a teenager. It is often believed that adolescent years are the most vulnerable
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 in humans life.
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, they tend to spend
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 on unnecessary things like drugs and became dependent due to peer pressure.
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, other
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 let their children work to finance themselves so they will learn the value of
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. In conclusion,
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 is the best gift anyone can have especially teenagers. Due to the fact that they already know their necessities but it is important to give limitations during
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stage
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 of life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial responsibility
  • budget
  • save
  • informed spending decisions
  • personal preferences
  • practical and efficient
  • unwanted or inappropriate gifts
  • impersonal
  • emotional value
  • thoughtfulness
  • personal consideration
  • wise financial decisions
  • frivolously
  • lasting memories and experiences
  • educational courses
  • hobby-related equipment
  • long-lasting positive impact
  • fostering interests and skills
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