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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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These days, many
students
 can have more chances to
study
 in different countries compare to the past when
students
 only could get their degrees in their own country's university. Since the movements of the society in the world, studying abroad has become
commonly
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 today and there are several advantages and disadvantages of
this
 phenomenon as follow. There are a couple of reasons why studying abroad can give a positive
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effect
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affect
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effect
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 on
students
.
First
 of
all
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 they can improve their foreign language skills or learn a new language from where they
study
.
For example
, the number of Korean
students
go
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to
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abroad to
study
 English, since the world has become globally and the English
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the
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 essential ability among young people.
Secondly
, they can experience the various type of cultures with foreign
students
 who have different cultural backgrounds. It leads to young
students
 who
study
 abroad are more likely to have
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 views
in
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 their life.
However
, aside from the positive aspects, there are some disadvantages of studying abroad. Actually, it takes a lot of money
besides
, can affect their family economy.
Students
 need to pay their tuition fee, get a house to stay in abroad safely and there are various consumptions exist to survive
in
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abroad.
In addition
, some
students
 handle very well about their new life,
on the other hand
, some others struggle with adapting
in
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 new environments. In conclusion, for these reasons mentioned above, these days young
students
 can get a lot of opportunities to go abroad to develop their education level.
However
, it is clear that some disadvantages exist that need to be considered.
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