Some people feel that music should be taught in schools while others belief it is better to focus on the sciences. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is believed that

musical

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classes are

unneccessary

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unnecessary

at schools and they should be replaced by more practical courses like science-based subjects. In my point of view,

music

is not a mandatory subject,

however

, it should not be removed completely from

school

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curriculum. Supporters

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the idea that science should replace musical

lessions

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lessons

permanently would argue that S.T.E.M subjects are more practical and can ensure brighter careers for their children. In our digitalized society, a surge of technology companies

such

as Facebook, Microsoft and IBM often seek

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talented graduates from

science related

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subjects

such

as I.T experts, engineers or programmers. And the wage for these positions

are

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very competitive which can ensure comfortable lives for these experts.

As a result

, with

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rising demand

in

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science occupations, more and more youngsters are willing to invest in technical careers,

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provide

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thousands of IT experts to many companies around the world.

On the other hand

, learning

music

at schools can help students enhance their knowledge and traditional values about their culture and national identity. Every country has their own form of art that needs to be inherited by the following generations.

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Teaching

courses about traditional

music

and musical

intruments

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instruments

at schools may be beneficial in maintaining these values.

Moreover

, some students have special abilities and

sense

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of

music

. Early exposure to

music

at school will nurture and discover gifted children in a country. With appropriate guidance and orientation, these talented students may become potential famous artists who create invaluable musical products

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the world. In conclusion, while I acknowledge

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importance of scientific classes, I

also

believe that

music

is an inevitable part and should be

remained

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retained

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in the school curriculum.