Some people prefer full-time jobs because they offer stability. Other people prefer casual jobs because of the freedom they offer. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The
job
is part of every people
life
and some
prefers
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full-time while others choose part-time because
this
kind of people needs freedom.
In
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this
essay discusses both viewpoints and
finally
, I would be given my personal opinion.
To begin
with, the main reason is the folks would like to choose
life
-time jobs because they are wanted a secure
life style
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this
means steadily salary. They have a lot of
responsibilty
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responsibility
such
as family commitments
therefore
, they never thought about
the
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flexible
work
in order to
this kinds
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of folks can stay one
job
to their entire
life
in other words
until retirement.
For example
, according to the survey said that more than 80% of the population can not like to change their
work
due to various reasons
such
as high salary, Reputation, and social status.
On the other hand
, some folks are liked
to
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casual employment because
this
type of population
are
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considered
first
is
job
satisfaction rather than anything
therefore
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, they do not stay permanent employment.
For instance
, in
Indian
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community is changed their
job
often when they will fell
this
work
is being bore
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while they will move
another
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profession. To conclude, undoubtedly each and every man needs
profession
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for their satisfying needs and wants.
Nevertheless
, the permanent
job
is given more benefit rather than flexible
work
. I think steadily
work
is better for
this
generation because we are living in
modern
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era, we need more money
for
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fulfill
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with
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our basic needs and sophistication
life
therefore
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,
this
is the best idea for everyone and
this
trend might increase in future days.
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