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You are working for a company. You need to take some time off work and want to ask your manager about this. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, explain why you want to take time off work, give details of the amount of time you need and suggest how your work could be covered while you are away.

#company #time #work #manager #amount
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to apply
leaves
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 for 2 weeks from coming Monday. As
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 my eye surgery is scheduled for
next
 week which is pending
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 the past two years.
Although
, it is a minor surgery
however
 my family doctor is suggesting
me
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to
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take proper rest of 14 days and advised me
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not to work on
Laptop
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 or do normal cooking rather he asked
to
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 do avoid all those activities which
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 strain on
the
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 eyes.
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, it would be difficult for me to work on
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post surgery
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. My
collegue
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colleague
 Monica is well aware of the situation and
also
, she
have
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 been working with me on all the present projects for a while now. She is willing to take
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resposibilities
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responsibilities
 of mine in my absence
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 so that we can meet our deadlines on time.
Although
, she is very helpful and talented
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I have asked her to call me for any
assisstance
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assistance
 whenever required.
In addition
 to it, she will be updating us daily via phone and email to you. Hope you will understand my situation and grant me leave for 2 weeks. Thanking you in anticipation. Yours faithfully Swati
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Respectful greeting (e.g., 'Dear [Manager's name],')
  • Time off, absence, leave of absence
  • Personal circumstances, compelling reason
  • Duration, number of days/weeks
  • Cover duties, delegate tasks, work handover
  • Alternative arrangements, contingency plans
  • Preparation, advance work, assistance
  • Gratitude, appreciate, understanding
  • Inconvenience, minimal disruption
  • Request approval, formally request
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