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Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they get older?

#parents #children #consequences #style
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Some consider that having
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 who easily allow their
children
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 for everything whatever they want cause detrimental effects for public and
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children
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 not to establish disciplines for their
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 and be
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permissible
 in every sphere without any boundaries.
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, even if
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 are aware of unhealthy foods they purchase these products when they are asked.
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, they harm their
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 themselves which cause
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various types of diseases,especially obesity. If father and mother grow up
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 kids collaboratively and prevent them from junk food by explaining them in
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, they will
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 to have intelligent and decent citizens for
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society.
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,if
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 do not effort to change their manners directed to their
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 and encourage them
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 shopping in the appropriate
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, they will be obliged to expend too much money for
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nonsense
. The
children
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 who try to achieve their goals
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 an
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aggressive
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 is the illustration for
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 situation. As they witness easy success without doing anything, but only to get something by forcing method. It haunts their memory for getting whatever they want by scolding
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 it will present bad
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behaviours
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 and egoist, unhumanist,self-
steem
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esteem
 people to our community. To conclude, the
parents
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 have to take into account
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 detrimental effects on their
children
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 and try to alter their rules and set up some strict discipline regulations in order to grow up
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- minded, witty, healthy young generation for future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • indulgent
  • entitlement
  • discipline
  • responsibility
  • nurturing
  • self-reliance
  • adversity
  • autonomy
  • validation
  • dependence
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