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Modern building change the character and appearance of towns and cities.The government should insist that new buildings be built in traditional styles to protect cultural identity.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that the character and appearance of towns and cities change with the widespread of modern
buildings
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. The government should protect the cultural heritage, by putting emphasis on building
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 inspired by traditional building style
instead
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 of contemporary style. I disagree with the statement.
This
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 essay will first discuss why modern
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 are necessary for nature and why building them won'
t
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 affect
the
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cultural identity.
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, changing
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 continuously with the current trend signifies why changing it with the environment is necessary.
This
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 is to say, today's
buildings
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 focus on
designs
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,
such
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 as fibreglass
designs
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, that are more eco-friendly, as compared to
buildings
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 that were built in the past.
As a consequence
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, they will contribute towards a better environment in the future.
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,
according to
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 a report by The Times in 2018, it was found that countries that continuously adapt to
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designs
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 based on the environment's needs will have 50% less pollution than the countries that don'
t
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.
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, new
designs
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 won'
t
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 affect the cultural identity, as these
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 help preserve the current heritage of the community and link it with the past.
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, these
designs
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 help the people in society understand the importance of the current values and beliefs and connect them with the past's culture.
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, it was reported by The History Channel in 2018, that towns, that base their
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with
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 today's trends, understand and carry their orthodox traditions better than the cities that don'
t
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. In conclusion,
this
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 essay strongly believes that modern
buildings
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 are relevant as they help build
infrastructure
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, which is good for nature and at the same time, they don'
t
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 harm the cultural persona of a city if anything they help
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 the current persona and connect it with the past.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly express your main ideas in the introduction. It helps the reader understand your position better.
coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the transitions between your paragraphs. Words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally' can help guide the reader through your essay.
task achievement
Add more examples to support your ideas. More specific examples can make your points stronger and clearer.
positive
You provide clear reasons for your opinion, showing logical thinking.
positive
You have a clear conclusion that sums up your main points well.
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