Some people think that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars and riding motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays,
traffic
congestion is being increased rampantly
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worldwide. It is difficult to maintain the
road
safety
program during
this
condition. A few people assert that
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way to increase
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road
safety
is to raise the minimum legal
age
for drivers. I completely agree with the same and the impending essay will elaborate my opinion.
To begin
with, presently in my country eligibility for driving a car or a
motor cycle
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is 18years
however
it should be changed to 20years to minimise the
road
accidents. Would government do
this
amendment for improving public
safety
? If the local authority changes the required
age
group to
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the licence,
as a result
, there would be
less
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vehicles and reduce the
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issues on the city streets.
For example
, a survey conducted by
Road
Safety
Authority on
accident
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an accident
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caused by
young
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generation. In
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most
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cases over 50%
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teenage students involved crossing the red light,
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speeding, and drunk and drive cases.
Consequently
, which leads to
traffic
and public
safety
issues.
On the other hand
, some individuals think that 18years is the best
age
for children to get
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driving licence. Despite changing the
age
, educate the people and conduct some events on
road
safety
. To illustrate, people should aware
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speed limits of school zones and
traffic
light importance
then
only the
traffic
concerns would be in the lower levels.
Otherwise
, it would be hard to control these problems.
Hence
, awareness programs could be helpful for knowing the rules of the
traffic
. In conclusion, to improve the
safety
in transportation understanding the
traffic
rules
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significant
although
I strongly believe that raising the
age
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is the best solution.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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