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Students should be taught academic knowledge so that they can pass exams, and skills such as cooking or dressing should not be taught. To what extent do you agree/disagree?

#students #exams #skills
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Overall development of a child is
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 success. Acquiring academic knowledge is important but is not enough to survive the ups and downs of life.
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, I disagree with the idea of limiting teaching to academic for the sake of passing exams. In
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 essay, I will discuss the importance of other skills along with academics. To commence with my disagreement, it should be noted that education is a medium of developing logic in a child's brain to face a situation.
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, academic helps to earn a living, but to be in
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,
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 needs to learn about how
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, if a great mathematician is called to honour his achievement at a function and he did not wear the appropriate clothing, he might not receive the respect he deserves.
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, a child must be taught about how to dress up in the
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 we will live in. There are certain moral skills and duties which every person expects from others in
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, providing
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 aid to an ailing patient is necessary for its survival, and a person nearby can assist in providing it.
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 is possible only if he has some basic knowledge or skill to do so.
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, it is not an obligation as part of academic teaching of helping a person in need, but
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 must do it on humanitarian grounds. To summarise the essay, it is absolutely necessary to teach social skills and moral values to students receiving academic qualification.
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 balance, without which, our life would always be a messy
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