Write about the following topic The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Health
is an essential component of a human's life.
However
, there are some people who think that
health
status is going to decline in
coming
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years. I completely agree with
this
statement because
sedentary
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of sedentary
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ifestyle
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lifestyle
and antibiotic resistance.
Firstly
, due to the advent of modern technology, many home appliances are available in markets which reduce the
amount
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of physical works in everyone's life so they may not be able to burn extra pounds from their body ar which can be accumulated
Similarly
, depending on the public transport minimises the scope of walking along with excessive consumption of fatty foods result in many lifestyle diseases.
For example
, it has been noted that
average
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the average
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body weight of human being has been increasing, eventually, they may end up
in
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apply
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having some serious
health
issues
Secondly
,
since
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apply
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the excessive use of pesticides, chemicals and antibiotic on both vegetables and animals products cause many
organism
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organisms
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became developed antibiotic resistance.
Therefore
, we cannot eradicate any kinds of infection as we reached its edge.
For instance
,
Covid-19
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the Covid-19
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pandemic outbreak hardly controlled as there
is
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are
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no feasible medications.
Moreover
, pollution is increasing at
a
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an
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alarming rate throughout the world.
As a result
, mankind would be affected in many ways,
such
as poor air quality, lack of water sanitation, and soil pollution. By seeing these scenarios.
situation
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in the foreseeable future. men's
health
would be in danger In conclusion, many people believe that
health
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the health
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condition of mankind will decline in
coming
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the coming
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future. I strongly agree with the view since
ifestyle
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lifestyle
and modern technology
make
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makes
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them sick.
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