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The Internal and external impacts on the tourism in Danang

Da
Nang
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 is recognized as one of Vietnam’s most promising and flourishing
tourism
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 attractions,
in particular
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, when owning its significant presence in the country’s GDP. Given that Da
Nang
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’s prospects are independent of
both
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 domestic and international elements, to some
tourism
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 officials’ point of view, there has had a belief that disadvantages have internally and externally inflicted considerable sufferings for
such
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 a dynamic
city
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,
however
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.
Firstly
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, it is undeniable that Da
Nang
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 is a magnificent destination as it possesses blessed beauty that no tourists can turn blind eyes on. To be specific, they stand a good chance of experiencing not only gorgeous and scenic views from nature but
also
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 the richness and diversity of culture. The more tourists are attracted to its beauty,
nevertheless
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, the more consequences are followed when it comes to the environment and infrastructure, specifically. To illustrate, the
city
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first
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 has to achieve solutions to local environmental change as there is an integration of other neighbouring regions on the purpose of commercials.
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, infrastructure is suffering from wearing out, which means an upgrade is in need to meet the requirements and available lands are getting used to being exploited in the not-too-distant future. As can be seen, internal factors play a negative role in the development of Da
Nang
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’s
tourism
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.
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, the beautiful
city
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 is caused externally to be vulnerable when the sudden appearance of Covid-19 has brought several burdens to every sector of the whole country, in
general
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,general
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 and
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tourism
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the tourism
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 industry,
in particular
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. By 2021, Vietnam has been through more or
less
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fewer
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 outbreaks of
this
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 disease while Da
Nang
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 has seemingly been severe the most. The
city
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 has been imposed to be in lockdown at least twice though there’s a marked tendency that many of
both
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 domestic and international tourists get
interest
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 in spending their safe relaxing time in Da
Nang
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.
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, the lockdown resulted from the unexpected waves of Covid-19 has led the
tourism
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 of
this
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 dynamic
city
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 to the financial and economic deadlock. To conclude, the factors embedded
in
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both
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 inside and outside of the
tourism
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 sector exerted substantial adverse impacts on its developments. It is crucial that Da
Nang
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’s authorities
nevigate
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navigate
both
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 of them in order to provide
an
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enthusiastic support for one of the most flourishing and promising
tourism
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 attractions
of
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in
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 the country.

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