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Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In
this
 world full of challenges, people tend to think that it is better to make
children
 become competitive . While others believe that cooperation must be encouraged as
this
 can result in a responsible individual. Having a sense of competition is indeed a challenge especially for
children
 who are striving hard in all aspects.
Children
 must be persuaded to be focused on to make them efficient in their responsibilities . Not only its encourages a
child
 to do his best but
also
 gives a feeling of fulfilment. In sports or studies, a
child
 must have the sense of direction not only to be good but to be one of the best,
For instance
, being a top achiever in a class or gaining awards definitely boosts self-confidence.
Thus
 it will help to maintain the kind of perseverance to be on top among the rest until his maturity.
However
, being competitive sometimes results in disappointments when failures or rejections happen thereby affecting a person's ego. It
also
 results in conflicts among his competitors making it a serious matter.
On the other hand
, a
child
 who is cooperative tends to be productive in all aspects. If a
child
 performs his tasks
accordingly
 and without pressure, a
child
 can have sound well-being socially and emotionally.
This
 would give him a sense of responsibility and independence , making that person grow maturely. In school especially when dealing with sports, we are asked to cooperate with our teammates to avoid conflicts
thus
 giving harmonious deals or friendships among
children
. I certainly believe that a
child
 must be taught how to be cooperative and respectful in all manners. We must avoid giving them pressures which somehow gives a feeling of competition amongst his classmates or friends. After all, we are equal and have to grow maturely and maintain peaceful relationships.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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